Ghostly Guardian - Review

Hey, all.

If you haven't read 'Ghostly Guardian' then feel free to check it out here.


Right, okay, need something new to read...oh, what's this? 'Ghostly Guardian'? Sounds intriguing...let's have a read.

--ten minutes later--

That was the stupidest thing I have ever read. What a piece of...

Okay, so there's this girl. Her name is Mariel. What a blatant rip off of Redwall.
She's got white hair.
And she's seventeen years old.
And she sees and hears things.

What is this?

OH, OH, I was wrong. She's actually being stalked by a ninja who claims he's been bound to her for some vaguely/unexplained reason.
Ha ha, yeah, right.
Totally.

He likes watching her sleep. Where have I heard this before? Hum....
TWILIGHT!

*Cough* *hack*

Apparently this ninja can also fly and predict the future. Surrealistic Deus Ex Machina detected. Beep beep beep beep!
So, Mariel knew this guy before? And he knew her too? But something wiped her memories?

She's thinking...oh NO WAIT STAAAHP!
.........
She fainted.

Oooh, creepy voice. Weird place. Nobody around. This must be a Justin Beiber concert!
Oh wait no, it's just her psyche. Ah, disappointment.

Mysterious monster gets defeated by ninja who managed to make his way into her mind and is wounded and she refuses to accept her memories of him because...?
WHAT IS THIS PILE OF, Of, of....
No seriously, what did I just read?

Okay okay, all joking aside, yes I wrote this. After posting/making it public, several girls told me they loved it.

All righty then.

You see, I wrote this story directly after I read Twilight. Twilight is the stupidest thing I ever read, but for kicks, I decided to make a rip-off version. 'Ghostly Guardian' is what I came up with.
Now I did have other intentions, but my main reason for writing this story was an experiment. Having seen the success of the Twilight genre, I knew exactly what elements made the series popular. Many girls I know don't like it because they are alert and aware of the bait that the conniving Stephanie Meyers hangs out there, but if they happened to read something that didn't have the label 'Twilight' on it, yet contained the selfsame elements, what would happen?

Well, this happened.
And now you know just how stupid this story is.

PSYCH!